Advanced Composition--An Essay DraftCommentInventory Sheet EXPERIMENTS IN CLASSICAL & ROGERIAN ARGUMENT Dr. J. Halden-SullivanSTUDENT'SNAME_ Please pay attention to the following suggestions as you revise the attached draft: _Re-think your choice ofAUDIENCE/GENRE. _Make your essay's PURPOSE more distinct. _Re-align your draft with the structure ofCLASSICAL/ROGERIANarguments (see Coe) _Re-think how effectively you engage readers in your INTRODUCTION. _Sharpen your THESIS: what is your argumentative edge? _I want to know more:EXPANDyour explanations/your research. _Where do you stand?Explain YOUR POSITION more fully, moredeliberately. _REFER TOyour chosen articlemore often to develop your claims. _Explain/interpretmore fullyyourarticle/sources. _Reconsider your TONE.You sound .
_Check to see if your paragraphs have TOPIC SENTENCES that clearly develop / expand /relate toyour thesis. _Re-think / clarify / strengthen your TRANSITIONS. _Re-think the order of points. _Re-think how effectively you engage readers in your CONCLUSION. _Check your sentence pattern variety. _Re-think the precision of your WORD CHOICES/PHRASING. _ INTEGRATE YOUR QUOTATIONS more smoothly: usecredit tagsand/or signal phrasesTO COMPLETE THE SYNTAX OF YOUR SENTENCE. _Please proofread for and control technical difficulties with: frag.fscsposs.rep.commas with coordination/subordination agr.unnecessary commassemi-colonscolonswwwfpp. punctuating in-text citationspunctuating quotations _Re-think your Works Cited page documentation. _When I read this draft, I really like _Additional revision tips for you: _Grade range of this draft: [A][B][C][r & r][other]
EXPERIMENTS IN CLASSICAL & ROGERIAN ARGUMENT
Dr. J. Halden-Sullivan STUDENT'S NAME _
Please pay attention to the following suggestions as you revise the attached draft:
_ Re-think your choice of AUDIENCE / GENRE.
_ Make your essay's PURPOSE more distinct.
_ Re-align your draft with the structure of CLASSICAL / ROGERIAN arguments (see Coe)
_ Re-think how effectively you engage readers in your INTRODUCTION.
_ Sharpen your THESIS: what is your argumentative edge?
_ I want to know more: EXPAND your explanations / your research.
_ Where do you stand? Explain YOUR POSITION more fully, more deliberately.
_ REFER TO your chosen article more often to develop your claims.
_ Explain / interpret more fully your article / sources.
_ Reconsider your TONE. You sound .
_ Check to see if your paragraphs have TOPIC SENTENCES that clearly
develop / expand / relate to your thesis.
_ Re-think / clarify / strengthen your TRANSITIONS.
_ Re-think the order of points.
_ Re-think how effectively you engage readers in your CONCLUSION.
_ Check your sentence pattern variety.
_ Re-think the precision of your WORD CHOICES / PHRASING.
_ INTEGRATE YOUR QUOTATIONS more smoothly: use credit tags and/or
signal phrases TO COMPLETE THE SYNTAX OF YOUR SENTENCE.
_ Please proofread for and control technical difficulties with:
frag. fs cs poss. rep. commas with coordination/subordination
agr. unnecessary commas semi-colons colons ww wf pp.
punctuating in-text citations punctuating quotations
_ Re-think your Works Cited page documentation.
_ When I read this draft, I really like
_ Additional revision tips for you:
_ Grade range of this draft:
[ A ] [ B ] [ C ] [ r & r ] [ other ]